Belizer

Hi everybody and all the best to you all.

Fortunately or unfortunately %) I am writing music. Here is one of my songs called Life Starts Killing You - see attachment

Lyrics

If you are running out of love
Life starts killing you
If you are slave of your need
Life starts killing you
If matters only what you see
Life starts killing you
If you don't know how to forgive
Life starts killing you

Is your life dried out by your crimes?
Does your soul dissolve into your pride?
No restriction when chasing your own dream.
Can you see sense in your defeat?

If you can not give up your pride
Life starts killing you
If there is nothing that you need
Life starts killing you
If you can find no sense in leaving
Life starts killing you
And if you think this world is yours
Life starts killing you

Is your life dried out by your crimes?
Does your soul dissolve into your pride?
No restriction when chasing your own dream.
Can you see sense in your defeat?

If you have emptiness inside
Life starts killing you
If you are guided by your mind
Life starts killing you
If you can stand no single loss
Life starts killing you
I know you think its only song
What if it's all true?

So enjoy and do not forget - any critics or feedback is a plus %))

 

Aqualung

I approve. Lol

The echo behind the lyrics is rather conflicting. The rhythm of it is different from the rest of the song so it tends to clash a bit with the actual vox and create a rather muddy sound. I think if you want to put an echo, consider only using it on the last work of a line.

The mix is kind of muddy, too. The guitars are too low.

I like your voice a lot, though. It reminds me of Ian Anderson, from Jethro Tull.

Compositionally, I think you've got a good idea. The transitions between the verses and the chorus is really good, and you've got that little bit of a bridge in there to mix it up.

Anyway, thanks again for uploading the track. I think I would buy a CD with tracks like this if the mix were improved a bit. Nice work.

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Belizer

Thank you for your detailed comments. Actually you are right. I shall check this song later and remix it probably. Again - thanx %)

Baphomet

Not bad at all... You recorded this at home? If you did its not bad at all. The delay on your voice may be a little to much because the rest of the instruments are so very clean. I dunno I really don't like the subject matter in the lyrics though.

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RickenbackerBassPlayer

I must ask, is this all only done by you or is it a band?

Singing was very well constructed, I didn't like the echo effect in the begining, it wasn't as heavy through out the song though. Guitar was a little foggy, I couldn't really hear it that well around 0:51 because the drums were a little loud. I like the lyrics too, nice song. Please post more.

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Belizer

2 baphomet4all and RickenbackerBassPlayer

Thank you for your attention and comments. This song is made at home using VST instruments. Vocal of course is live %) I need to know as more opinions as possible as still my songs are in process, and of course I shall post them here from time to time. Again thank you for your comments - they are important for me and I really appreciate them. Good luck and all the best %)

Belizer

Labyrinth - another song of mine %)

What do you need from life to be completely satisfied
What will you leave for others when for you comes time to die
You say that you don’t care surviving every single day
I think that it is you who turned your life into the shade

Way that you are to follow is nothing but the dust
It does not mater where you’re going matters how you’ll pass
All that you took from life will vanish in the past
Give more than you have taken time is running fast

What for you need your life when getting closer to the death
I think you have no answer life for you is all you have
I see you in a rush to get as much as you can get
Life gives, why do you take, will you find out until the end

Way that you chose to follow is nothing but the dust
It does not mater where you’re going matters how you’ll pass
All that you took from life will vanish in the past
Give more than you have taken time is running fast

What do you want to give what do you have that life can take
What will you give it for and why you think that it will change
All that you have inside results in what life gives to you
And everything you’ve given, was it really meant for you

Way that you chose to follow is nothing but the dust
It does not mater where you’re going matters how you’ll pass
All that you took from life will vanish in the past
Give more than you have taken time is running fast

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RickenbackerBassPlayer

I love your voice

It really has that "rock" feeling to it. Good job on this, the instrments were creative and recorded well. I love how you word things creativley instead of just saying the point out.

Can't forget the mention, great guitar solo.

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Belizer

Thanx Man %) I really appreciate your comments
Actually there is no recording except solo guitar and vocal %) All - VSTi

Rogue

Pimpin lyrics, keep it up. stay in touch.