Lady_Cyanide

Crave Your Touch

I think of you when the sky fades black
Slowly, show me what I lack
I crave your touch
I miss so much
I'll salvage what we had
To get me through this night
If I could find
The reason why

Deep inside
Know I cry
When I can't just simply see your face
Keep in mind
My heart is yours
To hold forever

I think of you as my worlds collapse
Save me from this soul attack
I miss your smile
Met for a while
And baby, I see your face
In the clouds on this day
So dark and gray

Deep inside
Know I cry
When I can't just simply see your face
Keep in mind
My heart is yours
To hold forever

I want to hold you
Until the stars crash down
I want to kiss you
While we both drown
I can taste your lips
Upon my own
The kiss of death
Bliss it's shown

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I want your leather-studded kiss in the sand
I want your love

 

Baphomet

Not bad. Love songs are always in style so it works... But something about it seems to lack. Probably some of the more simple lines like "I crave your touch
I miss so much" and "I miss your smile Met for a while" they just seem a little eager to make a rhyme without much substance turning it almost nursery rhyme like. Other than that it's decent.

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We stand pseudo life, slaves to machines.

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Trapaw

Seems pretty well written save for the lines Baphomet mentioned.
It does fit really well with the genre of music you described playing, so good job there.
This actually reminds me alot of a song I wrote a while back entitled My Mind Returns To Miller Hill.
But overall not a bad piece of work at all.

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