Off to Berlin

Mycheaprecords · 11-06-2008, 06:40 PM

Hey guys, here's a new song I made this afternoon. I wrote the lyrics while studying Law in the library and I'm not really used to write lyrics before making up some guitar part, so I had to rewrite things and stuff, and it's too bad because I lost some "meaning" during the process of doing that.

Anyway, I hope you'll enjoy more the lyrics than the basic melody of the song

Lyrics

Friends
I used to have some
back in the times
Yeah I was not alone
But now here I am

They left me with my heart of dust

I'm off to Berlin
Looking for something I couldn't explain
If ever asked for*

They left me with my heart of dust

Who will be the next one
to suffer from her ?
She just doesn't see
All the things she does

She left me with my heart of dust

Love
I used to be in
And now I am out
You can keep all your tricks
Because now I see clear

They left me with my heart of dust

*: I know it sounds wierd, because it should be "To", but what I mean is if someone asks for me, wonders where I am, and not if someone asks me to say why.

Aqualung · 11-06-2008, 08:27 PM

Can't listen now, will retry later.

RickenbackerBassPlayer · 11-06-2008, 10:24 PM

I liked it. Nice simply guitar melody and very well written lyrics.

To you.

Aqualung · 11-07-2008, 02:48 AM

"back in the times" is weird. Most people in English say "Back in the day".

"For" sounds fine.

The composition of this one is kind of weird. The lyrical composition seems a little out of place in this type of song. But I'm having trouble pinpointing why. Also, you listen to a lot more psychedelic music than I do, so don't take my word for it.

multiplayer · 11-07-2008, 12:33 PM

"Love
I used be in."

That part killed me (in a good way.)
You have a very special playing style. The melodic guitar is awesome.
And your voice reminds me of the old times.

Mycheaprecords · 11-07-2008, 11:27 PM

Thanks a lot Guys for listening !!!!

Aqua, I know what you mean, but as wierd as it may sound to say that : the atmosphere of the song was exactly the mood I was in when I wrote the lyrics

flightlessthoughts · 11-14-2008, 04:53 PM

Dude, first of all, I don't know how you put out so many songs, you must write a new song evey other day! And second, wow, I really liked this one. I kind of wished that it was a little longer, but it was very cool. Way to go!

alec.james · 11-17-2008, 01:00 AM

Nicely done. I'll be listening to this often.

flightlessthoughts · 11-21-2008, 04:01 PM

Oh yeah, and I've been meaning to tell you, your voice has gotten much better in the last while. I can totally see a major difference between this new stuff and your old stuff. Just a little encouragement.

Cheers, Buddy

Mycheaprecords · 11-23-2008, 05:31 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by flightlessthoughts

Oh yeah, and I've been meaning to tell you, your voice has gotten much better in the last while. I can totally see a major difference between this new stuff and your old stuff. Just a little encouragement.

Cheers, Buddy

Thanks man, that means a lot to me !!!

But I still need to practice if I wanna sing like you

11-06-2008, 06:40 PM	#1
Mycheaprecords The Red Telephone Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: in the X-files Posts: 421 Thanks: 191 Thanked 52 Times in 45 Posts Rep Power: 55	Hey guys, here's a new song I made this afternoon. I wrote the lyrics while studying Law in the library and I'm not really used to write lyrics before making up some guitar part, so I had to rewrite things and stuff, and it's too bad because I lost some "meaning" during the process of doing that. Anyway, I hope you'll enjoy more the lyrics than the basic melody of the song Lyrics Friends I used to have some back in the times Yeah I was not alone But now here I am They left me with my heart of dust I'm off to Berlin Looking for something I couldn't explain If ever asked for* They left me with my heart of dust Who will be the next one to suffer from her ? She just doesn't see All the things she does She left me with my heart of dust Love I used to be in And now I am out You can keep all your tricks Because now I see clear They left me with my heart of dust : I know it sounds wierd, because it should be "To", but what I mean is if someone asks for me, wonders where I am, and not if someone asks me to say why.* __________________ Check out my latest song in the Music Showcase people! Last edited by Mycheaprecords : 03-07-2009 at 03:32 PM.

11-06-2008, 08:27 PM	#2
Aqualung Pshaw! Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Washington Posts: 11,539 Thanks: 527 Thanked 731 Times in 684 Posts Rep Power: 276	Can't listen now, will retry later. __________________ Here we go. Mushu cereal for breakfast with duck sauce.

11-06-2008, 10:24 PM	#3
RickenbackerBassPlayer Play the music, not the instrument Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Behind You Posts: 3,749 Thanks: 138 Thanked 188 Times in 177 Posts Rep Power: 143	I liked it. Nice simply guitar melody and very well written lyrics. To you. __________________ Make sure to read the Rules for posting. Check out the KMA Review team thread post if interested. If you have any problems please feel free to Send me a message.. "Music is a higher revelation than all wisdom and philosophy." - Ludwig Van Beethoven

11-07-2008, 02:48 AM	#4
Aqualung Pshaw! Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Washington Posts: 11,539 Thanks: 527 Thanked 731 Times in 684 Posts Rep Power: 276	"back in the times" is weird. Most people in English say "Back in the day". "For" sounds fine. The composition of this one is kind of weird. The lyrical composition seems a little out of place in this type of song. But I'm having trouble pinpointing why. Also, you listen to a lot more psychedelic music than I do, so don't take my word for it. __________________ Here we go. Mushu cereal for breakfast with duck sauce.

11-07-2008, 11:27 PM	#6
Mycheaprecords The Red Telephone Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: in the X-files Posts: 421 Thanks: 191 Thanked 52 Times in 45 Posts Rep Power: 55	Thanks a lot Guys for listening !!!! Aqua, I know what you mean, but as wierd as it may sound to say that : the atmosphere of the song was exactly the mood I was in when I wrote the lyrics __________________ Check out my latest song in the Music Showcase people!

11-07-2008, 12:33 PM	#5
multiplayer aka "wako-kun" Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 17 Thanks: 7 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Rep Power: 26	"Love I used be in." That part killed me (in a good way.) You have a very special playing style. The melodic guitar is awesome. And your voice reminds me of the old times.

11-14-2008, 04:53 PM	#7
flightlessthoughts Take luck!! Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 502 Thanks: 55 Thanked 59 Times in 46 Posts Rep Power: 60	Dude, first of all, I don't know how you put out so many songs, you must write a new song evey other day! And second, wow, I really liked this one. I kind of wished that it was a little longer, but it was very cool. Way to go! __________________ Check out my latest song http://www.keepmusicalive.com/have-l...hts-t8431.html

11-17-2008, 01:00 AM	#8
alec.james Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: California Posts: 110 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 17 Posts Rep Power: 29	Nicely done. I'll be listening to this often.

11-21-2008, 04:01 PM	#9
flightlessthoughts Take luck!! Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 502 Thanks: 55 Thanked 59 Times in 46 Posts Rep Power: 60	Oh yeah, and I've been meaning to tell you, your voice has gotten much better in the last while. I can totally see a major difference between this new stuff and your old stuff. Just a little encouragement. Cheers, Buddy __________________ Check out my latest song http://www.keepmusicalive.com/have-l...hts-t8431.html

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