Trapaw

Here are two songs I have written since I last had an extended stay on this site. I never officially released either of them for a couple of reasons, but I do enjoy letting folks hear 'em. Just click the title of each to hear the song.

This first one was written after a good friend of mine did a painting of a rabbit looking up at a city suspended above the earth using steel cables. I did alot of experimenting with vocal effects and such on this one, especially since it's more of a progressive deathcore-ish style I guess. I like how it came out, but the guitars sound like crap...moreso than usual with my stuff, haha. Oh well.

The City Afloat
It came at night
Steeped in the darkness
Harboring no light
Hanging in the silence
The air begins to change
Everything pure is tainted
Sweet smells sour
Smells like poison

As the city floats, citizens stare in wonder
Never noticing they have become the prey
To a pestilence that will sour their hearts
Even as they move to their temple and pray

No
Do not approach this place
You won't make it out alive
You're too weak
The bright light
Destroys all of your will
Leaving you a shell

Worry spreads far and fear spreads wide
Nobody here is sleeping at night
This city afloat sitting in silence
It's mere presence inciting this violence
Decision was made and it must me torn down
We have to shoot it right out of the sky
But how can you fight what you don't understand
Even if you use all of your might

"I say kill it"
"I say leave it"
A call to arms
We move tonight

There was no war
No fight
It was a massacre
I watched in fear as my brothers
Turned on one another
I was there to witness human genocide
Caused by human hands
My only solution was to look to the sky
At that which we don't understand

You blocked the sun
You filled the sky
You are the reason
Earth's empty tonight
There in the sky
You look down at grey soil
Oblivious
To all the turmoil

You offer no hope
Offer no explanation
We are the reason
For our own extinction
I look to the sky
At the city afloat
Imagine heaven
Imagine hope
Could I too soon escape
This world of pain
Could eternal life
Too soon begin
I lay with my brothers
Lay down my head
And we'll do the dance
The dance of the dead

This one...I'm not really sure about. It's definitely a prime example of my more metalcore style I do from time to time. I read the title on a billboard and went home, began tooling around on the guitar. I really wanted to work on some palm-muted riffing, so I took this song as a chance to do so. The chorus could REALLY have benefited from more diversity between the lead and rhythm, but...whatever...I dig it.
Also...Bullshit solo FTW and no pitch correction on the cleans, so they suck...Sorry about that, haha.

Goodnight Courtney, See You In The Morning
After you have gone to sleep
Pray to the Lord your soul to keep
Fall to your knees and begin to weep
All the love you hold, it kills
There are crescent moon cuts on your hands
The kind you make by digging deeper in
But you find you're gripping nothing but sand
Your fingers slipping is all you feel

Just tell me would you want to
Sever ties to this world

In the shadows I'll wait (My love)
Until I can hold you again (In my arms)
Tethered to the earth (My dear)
Hoping to feel the sun on my skin (To feel warm)

Now I find that the darkness loves her
She dances with it just like a lover
Paying no mind to the ghosts above her
As the moon rises over the hills

Just tell me would you want to
Sever ties to this world

In the shadows I'll wait (My love)
Until I can hold you again (In my arms)
Tethered to the earth (My dear)
Hoping to feel the sun on my skin (To feel warm)

She looks up at nil but gray earth
Never seeing what she is worth
Buried in a box that'll never see day
Secrets can't be hidden that way

In the shadows I'll wait (My love)
Until I can hold you again (In my arms)
Tethered to the earth (My dear)
Hoping to feel the sun on my skin (To feel warm)

Secrets can't be hidden that way

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UkuleleJim

I like your lyrics. Good stuff here.

You spend too much time explaining the music, though. Don't make so many excuses... let the music speak for itself. It doesn't need to be defended.